In The Scraps of Wool by Bill Colegrave, the author uses Description, Mood, Perspective and a different spin on a well known idiom.
In the story, the author uses description to describe a region and the gateway to the region. The region that was described by the author was Kashmir and the gateway that he talked about, Qazigund. Firstly, the author described kashmir and the language he used to describe the area was very nice, it made me feel relaxed and it seemed like a beautiful place and area to be. For example, it states “the milky blue sky”. This sky can be referred to as picturesque and perfect and the author can't wait to arrive there. On the other hand, the gateway to Kashmir, Qazigund seemed very nasty and dangerous and the author described the men with red beards and the human excrement. These red beards can be attributed to blood and violence and show a very negative addition to a already dirty area, the bazaar being dirty and messy can show how people might have left in a rush due to the red bearded men, but that is for the reader to imagine.
The author also uses the perspective of the reader to help understand what is going on and it shows how he describes the bigger picture first, only for the reality to show up when the reader also arrives to Qazigund. Originally when I read, I came to believe that the red bearded men raided Qazigund and that was the reason that it was in shambles and so ruined, but after thinking and talking to my table, realized that it was wrong and that they are actually leaving the town.
I liked this story and his it kind of shows the idiom, the grass is always greener on the other side, and even though the area looked nicer, once he was there it truly was not nice and more of a mess and a dump then he expected it to be. I also liked how the author got the mood to help us formulate our opinions, almost putting us in the story and making us think about whats going on.
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